Achieving Clarity 1. We need this information September 1, 2010 by noon. 2. These laptops with replace our broken desktops. 3. If we don't purchase we will fall behind in production. 4. Lightning strikes in Waite Park causing our computers to crash and lose data. 5. If there were more employees in Target they would have caught John stealing batteries. Avoiding obscure words

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Nov 27, 2013 (3 years and 8 months ago)

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Achieving Clarity

1. We need this information September 1, 2010 by noon.

2. These laptops with replace our broken desktops.

3. If we don't purchase we will fall behind in production.

4. Lightning strikes in Waite Park causing our computers to crash and
lose data.

5. If there were more employees in Target they would have caught John stealing batteries.


Avoiding obscure words


1. As very large scale Integration (VLSI) continues to develop in increase of specific simulators will be
used.

2. As you requeste
d at the start of the year, I am forwarding my regular quarterly letter.

3. Though Randolph was aware of his reponsibility to advise you of any employment issues, he failed to
do his duty.

4. Along is an explanation of our reason for extra services, follow
ing your request.

5. Please be aware that the sale represents a successful finish.


Active Voice

1.The accounting dept will do this procedure.

2. We got twice the benefits from attending the conference.

3. The training supervisor gave a detailed presentati
on of information.

4. Allied representatives supplied analytical equipment for upgrades.

5. We attended the symposium on polymerization.


Reducing Word Length

1. Teach

2. Excepect

3. Make Sure

4. Work With

5. See

6. Go on

7. Trouble

8. Shows

9. At First

10
. Now


Reducing Sentence Length

1. The progress reports should be complete by the fifteenth of each month.

2. Would you answer a few a questions about your proposal
?
.

3.

A

pay increase is not merited due to your length of employment.

4.
Y
our sump pump resulted in damage to your neighbor

s property. You must fix the problem or they
may sue you.

5. C
all

me

with questions.

I had corrected the other version without the reducing sentence length previo
usly.